Help with script

[jack jutson]

I have a basic idea for a script for a short film and I need some suggestions as to how I can improve it, give it a twist, make it not so anticlimatic. Its about Sam, who's 15. He goes and stays at his grandpas house by the sea every summer. He loves the days but at night, he's **** scared of all the sounds because they remind him of his little sister who drowned years back when he was suppossed to be looking after her. One day he decides to visit the beach where she drowned, and he sees her gravestone for the first time. Then he goes home.

I need help with this ending. What can I do to make it more interesting?
Contructive suggestions and criticism only

cheers boys and girls!!

[soulfilms]

i think the ending sounds ok. faced his demons and finally got over a significant hurdle in his life i think it's the middle, after hearing the voices that you need to think about.

[deanl]

Hey there.

I agree with soulfilms it sounds fine. Just write the script and see where it goes. Post it on here and well tell you what we think.

Despin out.